Story Idea Outline Revision D

[General_Hoohah]

This is a story idea I've had for a few years. I offered it to Cmdr Wayne... but I don't even know if he was going to use it or not. Anywho, here it is. This is just a basic outline of my ideas.


Story Concept C, Rev. 02

In 2042, Hubble II picked up an object slowly drifting into our solar system. After observing it for nearly twenty years as it slowly approached our solar system, NASA concludes that it's derelict, does not seem to have any means of propulsion, and that it looks as if its sustained massive hull damage. They also believe it to be some sort of storage freighter, perhaps a barge of some sort, or even part of a larger ship or station. They have many guesses, but aren't really sure what it is, but the military wants it! BAD!

In 2062, NASA goes under military control and a fake mission is staged for the American people. They announce they are going to land on Pluto or some other far away planet for some kind of atmosphere analysis, or something of that nature. What they really plan on doing is intercepting the derelict object before it collides with a planet, or worse, other nations notice it and debate over how to share what ever they find on it or perhaps even fight over it. In 2065, the object is quickly intercepted and hidden behind Pluto for study.

In 2070, an overwhelming amount of data is gathered from the object, and it is found that it is nearly one hundred years old. It was only a small chunk of a much larger ship, and that section of ship had once been used as an area to store supplies. Not only that, but this massive ship was a warship! Records and schematics of highly advanced military based technology, crafts, weapons, molecular manipulation and nanotechnologies are also collected, including something they cannot explain; a small piece of a very large, highly advanced machine that had probably been under development at the time of the war ship's destruction as this technology was more advanced than anything else found.

In 2074, the military seals up every hole in the vessel, easily converting the large craft into a suitable research facility. Over the next ten years, the US Military makes tremendous strides, improving their nanotechnology by combining their own knowledge and ideas with what they found aboard the derelict debris. Using this, they learn to not only build more complex technology, but also learn to do it while consuming less and less energy and using smaller and smaller nano-lathing equipment.

With nanotechnology, they learn to build highly advanced equipment that can manipulate molecules, giving scientists the ability to strip a molecule of the elements making it up, then use those elements to create new molecules!

A new branch for space exploration and defense is formed within the US Military in 2090, making NASA totally obsolete. They create a new fake NASA that is mostly just for show, so nothing looks out of the ordinary.

By using nanotechnology, a massive collection of space stations, space ports, research facilities, ship yards, bases, resource stations, and training facilities were built in the outer asteroid belt of our solar system and on Pluto, Titan, Europe, Uranus, and Saturn, within only several years! Enormous asteroids were mined for their elements and gases, and used for the building material needed for this immense project. Everything needed to sustain and support life could be replicated using nanotechnology, and storing supplies was no longer a problem because they could be created so quickly, as long as each base was equipped with a nanotech factory. By 2094, space travel between solar systems was possible and large ships were under construction.

By now the trajectory of the space wreckage and point of origin had been long determined. In 2097 a fleet of ships left their docks and set out on a long mission. Later in that same year, the debris field from which the derelict vessel originated was found. A small research outpost on a nearby planet was established. It was a desert like planet with small tropical oceans, and scattered wild life, astoundingly not that far different from life on our planet. The planet had low metal resources, but served as a more than an acceptable place to establish the first base outside our solar system.

According to data logs, found in escape pods found on its surface, the planet was named Wren. However, no traces of who ever occupied them were found. After several years of sifting through wreckage on and off the planet, they were able to calculate what direction the ship had come from by slowly collecting and translating data logs, and found records of stops around the galaxy. A staff of thirty-two men and women were left on Wren to finish establishing a base and to conduct research. The rest returned home with what they had found, and the decision to trace the war ship's route and find the pieces to this mysterious unknown technology was made.

A new flagship was built for this long mission, measuring over three miles long, and armed to the teeth for what ever lied ahead. Several newly developed Mobile Nanotech Production Units were loaded into its storage bays for the establishment of ground based military bases. Its decks included living quarters and all the comforts of home for over fifty thousand military personnel, black ops, research and development, and security personnel. The ship also featured many areas for training, relaxation, entertainment, etc. Several support ships designed to piggy back on the flagship were also built, along with four squadrons of space fighters, recon ships, utility ships, and drop ships, which were loaded into its hangars.

After nearly ten years of development and construction, the flagship began its journey in 2112, eventually arriving at a war torn planet, whose ecosystem had been totally killed off. It didn't seem to have once been a heavily populated planet in the least, as they only found a small collection of military installations. The planet's surface was similar to Jupiter, but smaller in size, about the size of earth. They explored the gloomy installations, finding thousands of corpses and wrecked war units. The events on this planet were estimated to have happened about the same time as the destruction of the war ship. Using information found on the barge and the space debris, they figured out where to find the next piece, which was found in a hidden underground prototype development lab, still being guarded by automated defense mechs and defenses. Who ever was developing this incredible technology was taking great lengths to hide it from someone, but from who is the question.

By combining every amount of data they've found, starting with the barge and ending with this new find, they head to another solar system, finding a similar base. The story is the same, and they defeat another automated defense system, and secure the next piece which was again stored in a secret location. They also try to find as many clues as they can and attempt to put together the mystery of who created this technology, what it was intended for, and who's been killing them all off. Also, they can't help to wonder which side was which. Were the creators of this technology or their killers the 'bad guys'?

The humans travel to another solar system and drop their troops and science teams on a new planet, but this time they make an unpleasant discovery. A once largely populated world was now completely killed off. The massive amount of destruction is frightening as they observe the billions of skeletons and crumbled cities, littering the planet. Again they find another piece, found in a dangerous base that is not only guarded but falling apart, resulting in several men losing their lives, and only one successful rescue of a recon team. Nervously but still determined, they follow the clues and travel to another system, this time finding another military base similar to the previous ones. This time however, they are attacked on the ground by several light scout ships, and are forced to destroy a small military outpost, which was sending a long-range message deep into outer space. It's too late though, as the message had already been received and replied to. They of course secure the next piece. What really scares them however is the signal was sent to the same exact location the next set of clues pointed!

Many passengers aboard the ship become nervous, mostly the research teams, and request that they do not continue any farther until more data is gathered before they go rushing into anything. A meeting is held to discuss the possible consequences of going any farther, but because they are so close to figuring out what this unknown technology is, they decide to continue. They secure the next piece of the puzzle, and continue forth to the next solar system. While on route, they prepare for the worst, making sure every ship and every piece of equipment is in top condition.

As soon as they set up a base, they are instantly attacked by ground and air forces. After a long vicious battle and many casualties, the next puzzle piece is secured and the humans quickly retreat to the next solar system. However, the aliens they encountered were horrifying. They loved to kill, butcher, and torture any human they could find, and decorated their ships with blood, bones, and dead bodies. It was recorded by one soldier that a live human soldier had been chained to the front of an enemy tank, screaming as friendly fire ripped his flesh apart. Daunted and distraught, they press on, but none of them will ever be the same after what they saw.

Figuring they don't have much time until their new enemies catch up to them, they establish several military bases. Alien craft arrive soon afterward, and the humans try to fend off the enemy for as long as they can until the next piece is found, but the primary military base falls. A team is sent out to try and get the base on line, and successfully hold off the aliens for a good amount of time, but after several raging battles, the aliens find the next piece and leave the system. The humans, battered and nearly beaten, find the site where the next piece was taken from, gather the data they need to know where the aliens are going, then quickly board the flagship and head for the next piece of the puzzle. While on route, the humans begin to rethink their strategies, and new units and weapons are added to their ground and air forces.

The aliens have beaten the humans this time to the next planet and have already established a large base, but seem to be having trouble obtaining the next piece, as it is being guarded by a massive force of automated air and ground units. The human research teams finally find out what the aliens already know. This mystery technology is a warp gate, enabling travel from one place to another, instantly from one gate to another, no matter the distance! The best part is, if they can collect all the data and pieces, they'll be able to replicate it! Realizing the significance of this kind of technology, a massive string of battles breaks out, all three sides fighting each other. The aliens use every dirty trick in the book and then some. Each time a human base is brought back on line after being ravaged, another one is taken down. Meanwhile the humans are also fighting off the automated forces, and trying to figure out exactly where the next piece is being kept, and trying to protect their research bases.

The battlefields are littered with wreckage as far as the eye can see. Battle after massive battle the humans some how endure against the bloody tanks decorated with bones and body parts, that just seem to be driven by a blood lust to kill, until finally both sides figure out where the next part is being held. Both stage an assault.

The humans and aliens create a base near the site at opposite ends and launch a strike, resulting in all three sides surprising each other by all of them meeting at the same time, resulting in one final major battle on this planet. Even with the newer types of ships and weapons the humans have been developing, made specifically to fight against this new enemy and their vicious style of warfare, the humans still fall, but not without securing the next part. They quickly leave the system in pursuit of the next piece, but not before leaving behind a tactical nuke to destroy any evidence of where the next piece is.

The human side is nearly crippled and unable to fight another battle like the ones they just barely escaped from. Half of the crew has been wiped out by the aliens, and they have no idea what they are going to do when they are caught up with. The aliens have a harder time finding the next site, giving the humans a brief few weeks to try and get reorganized. At the next site, the humans find out by translating a log, that unless the coordinates are changed, once the gate is first activated, it will automatically connect to another gate that has been built in the center of a collective of several massive military bases.

The humans get a sneaky idea and corrupt that log so instead of military bases, it says civilian space stations, then stage a fake mission where they group all the pieces in one place, then pretend to try and protect them, intending for the aliens to win and secure all the pieces. It works, and the aliens piece together the gate close to the planet. Less than several hours later, an entire war fleet of mixed alien ships come out of the gate and destroy the alien warship fleet with a massive barrage of fighters and warheads. The fleet of war ships contact the human flagship and make peace with the humans, explaining to them what this is all about and welcome them as a new ally against the race of war criminals they and their allies have been fighting for thousands of years. They speak greatly of the race who created the warp gates, but tell us that race has been nearly wiped out, save for a small handful who were rescued from stranded ships and bases that were evacuated before being completely destroyed.  They were an ancient race of highly advanced beings, and were the first to be attacked by the race of war criminals. They were the ones who created an alliance of five different species of intelligent life, against the threat. However, they were also the first to be completely wiped out as a result of that action.

The humans join the alliance, but are soon told they have left a trail for their new enemy, right to earth! However, because of the condition of the human forces, who cannot fight at the moment because they are in such bad shape and are no match for their new enemy's main forces, several flag ships and destroyers have been sent to guard the Earth's solar system. While the humans recover, they are educated about this new enemy, how they fight, their technology, and how to counter against it. As a result the humans develop a large number of new units, including new ground forces, air units, advanced resource and production plants, weapons, and defenses. They are also given shield technology, and other various technologies to help them in their new war.

The human flagship returns home, using new stealth technology to slip right by enemy scout ships. They reappear right in front of their home base on the edge of their solar system, startling those who had never seen such advanced technology. Everything is explained, and soon a fleet of war ships are built in 2114, which head off to fight their new enemy in a string of intense battles across the galaxy, trying to help restore peace once again and protect their home planet and others from this race of vial monsters.

THE WAR RAGES ON

THE END

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The dates will probably have to be changed.

My idea is to combine this story idea with current BZ2 mods.

Instead of using nano-technology to build stuff... the advanced tech and nano-techdata collected from the wreckage unlocks the secret of how to manufacture biometal, and other new technologies, including medical advances.

The race who designed this technology could be a race we're unfamiliar with who was at one time at war with the Hadeans, which explains how they came across biometal.

The human forces are a secret faction of the US and a few other nations, who break off from the EDF, and are mostly made up of original forces from the ISDF who are sick of the EDF and bickering nations who can't agree on anything.

Pretty straight forward ideas, and I'm really interested in what you guys think.... especially Avatar.

My idea for the title of the story is Destiny's Gate.

[AHadley]

A very, very well-written storyline. I like.

Get BBB and Lizard to have a look at this, maybe the race who were nearly wiped out can be arranged to be the Prometheans Lizard had planned to appear in FleshStorm, had he done all he wanted to. Some evidence of their technology can be seen on Oasis.

Something else, too... the automated defence network could be a form of Mechana (an ADN featured in FS)

I think you may have just written a plausible storyline for FS3, my friend

[TheJamsh]

Storyline for FS3 is already done i believe, so was FS2's before production even began.

FS was meant to be a trilogy, but i think Lizard just lost interest.

[AHadley]

Maybe we should have FS4 then, part four in the trilogy

[General_Hoohah]

Yay! You guys like it!

I was thinking that the allied group of aliens could have secrets about biometal we didn't know about and could share it with you at the end of the game, which could be a starting point for the next story. Kinda like, the key to unlocking the other half of the biometal technology we never new existed... but maybe the Hadeans did?

Also since the NSDF can manufacture biometal, I was thinking that maybe a factory could be build that would slowly build crates. The crates would be made of pure biometal, and would be worth 100 scrap each. All you'd have to do is recycle them with the constructor. Teams in multiplayer could even fight over crates scattered around maps after a biometal transporter crash.

Any who, as the story goes on, I want the ISDF to continue to learn little bits of information about biometal and develope better technology, until the end where they're given all the information by the allied alien races who posess all of the information.

My idea for this race of war criminals is that their ships look... whats the word. Kinda more towards the CCA units... but more industrial looking and more threatening. Not all modern and sleak looking like the NSDF units. A completely different style of ships than you guys are used to.

I also had an idea for one of the military base planets. A planet made of nothing but forest made up of very tall evergreen trees, with raised stone pathways and stone clearings. I was thinking it could be an old planet once inhabited by a long gone race killed off by the Hadeans or the War Crimials.

This is how I see it working in terms of races.

There's plenty of conflict in this story. The War Criminals are enemies of EVERYONE and the Hadeans are still out there lurking around but haven't showed up yet.

I've actually thought of an ending that could lead to another story. The wiped out ancient race of aliens could be one of the biggest enemies of the Hadeans, and drove them out of their galaxy. The Hadeans find out and rush over to claim their old enemie's territory, only to find out that a group of allied alien races have moved in and are protecting it AND the hand full of surviviors. Not only that, but they've shared all the secrets of biometal with not only the allies but the humans as well. The Hadeans are pissed and sware to completely wipe out everyone and wage war, and in a fit of rage they unleash the furies and new biometal technology.

[AHadley]

It would be useful to point out at this stage that the Hadeans are part of an alliance with the Humans and Scions, with each aware of the other's existance (unlike their initial relationship) and that after FE / during PF is the New Golden Age. Maybe this is the Hadean Imperialist Movement again? I can see this mod becoming a canon part of the story much like FE did.

Community Project 2, anybody?

[General_Hoohah]

Did FE 1.3 ever come out? Last time I saw, they kept saying wait we're working on it, but a year went by and still the same answer. I just gave up. Did they ever finish it?

[Warfreak]

It's a work in progress.

RD is doing both FE 1.3 and G66 as well as other 1.2 mods last I checked. (Uler being one of them)

[Clavin12]

Bringing back old alien or human races always is interesting if its done the right way. If its done the wrong way, or if too many mods have already done it with the same race, it can end out cheesy.

[cheesepuffly]

Did FE 1.3 ever come out? Last time I saw, they kept saying wait we're working on it, but a year went by and still the same answer. I just gave up. Did they ever finish it?

Its out, but only for PB3. Its not working for the current version.

Nice story, didnt wanna barf so thats a good sign. But yeah Lizard and BBB are the best at storys see what they thing. THEY ARE THE DECIDERS!


And i wish a 1.3 community project would start. Think about how awesome it would be? Much more awesome than FE i would bet. Maybe it could be Remembered Allies or something.

[Commando]

I started it then passed it on to Red Devil for the DLL work.

[Clavin12]

You could make a story line that brings back romans, or greeks, or some other old civilization. MAybe something like they got kidnapped by hadeans in like the year 200 B.C. but escaped and started their own life on some distant planet. Good idea?

[General_Hoohah]

hmmm

That's actually not a bad idea. Suppose some of the wisest greeks made allies of the Cthonians, the ones who invented the biometal, and were taught how to use technology. They left earth to start their own new world using that technology. Since they were allies of the Cthonians, they were declared enemies by the Hadean Crown. So they used their technology and intelligence to advance the biometal technology and invent gate travel. The hadeans stole the idea from them and created their own version of the gate technology.

However, the greeks were more intelligent and their wisdom enabled them to eventually scare off the Hadeans. They swore they'd return one day, and left the Greeks alone.

As a result of exploring the galexy, the greeks stumbled apon a race of insane war criminals, bent on torture and murder. They stole several ships from the Greeks, and learned enough about the biometal technology to use it... then as a result of the spoils of war, learned more and more about the biometal. Now their race has quadrupled in size and power, and they butcher every world they come accross.

This race of insane lunatics doesn't use tactics, they just kill, kill, kill. They throw them self at you suicidaly until their either dead or victorious. Then they burn, rip apart, eat, and decorate their ships with the dead, keeping skulls as tropheys.

Their tanks are fearsome death machines, decorated with blood, chains, and skulls.

They're insane, they have no desire other than finding more enemies to butcher and spread as far as they can.

When a tank is destroyed, they'd rather die than retreat. Instead, they pull out a huge plasma rifle and just start blasting away until you kill them. They only carry heavy ranged weapons. Plasma rifles, miniguns, chainguns, and rocket launchers.

They're ugly and scary as hell looking, with black cold eyes, large boney jaws, a large stature, and large pointed jagged teeth. Their frame is slightly bent at the upper spine. They love to kill, the very thought makes them drool.

[AHadley]

Prometheans are believed to be the race who invented Biometal.

[General_Hoohah]

Okay, then it could be them... and I actually like that idea better. Studying their ruins could give the ISDF a lot more info about biometal, so you can continually upgrade their tech as the story progresses.